[Dreaming Of...]
Alone in this lonely room
No thoughts fill my head
And my emotions have deserted my tears
[You...]
I try to get up
I try to want to get up
But again, I roll over and go back to sleep
[Wheverever You Are.]
My dreams are filled with those I left
Wishing to be forgotten by some
Unforgotten dream
And as I dream
The tears play back once more
[I Never Wanted...]
I open my eyes
And looking into the darkness
All I can hear is silence
[To Hear It...]
I take so little solace from it
But its all the solace I'll get
[That Deafening Silence.]
For my hearts been ripped out
And has left a hollow pit
[Don't Leave Me Alone Here...]
Its monday
And I'm already giving up
[Let Me Belong Here With You.]
Tuesday tomorrow
And I'm not ready to get back up
[Just Don't Let Me Go Like This.]
Roll over and go back to sleep
Maybe later I'll be able to weep again
For what I've done
[Why Can't You Hear Me?]
[Am I Really So Weak?]
[Maybe I'm Better Off This Way...]
But that was never the question, was it?
Are you really better off without me?
[I Hope Someday You'll Hear Me.]
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Sweet Silence
Sweet Silence
Please, I am but a smol potate.
Past Names you'll know its me by: Demyx, Dreaming Awake, Lord Koryu
Past Names you'll know its me by: Demyx, Dreaming Awake, Lord Koryu
Re: Sweet Silence
2 and 4 are good. The other ones have potential but are too short and don't seem to go anywhere.
Re: Sweet Silence
2 and 4? Could you please elaborate?
Please, I am but a smol potate.
Past Names you'll know its me by: Demyx, Dreaming Awake, Lord Koryu
Past Names you'll know its me by: Demyx, Dreaming Awake, Lord Koryu
Re: Sweet Silence
I don't know what you're talking about, I thought it was a poem as a whole, something that has cemented you to a single thought of weakness. A missing effect from one person to another. I know what this is about.
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Re: Sweet Silence
Its one poem as a whole, but you can also look at it as two poems, if you only read the italicized portion as one.
Please, I am but a smol potate.
Past Names you'll know its me by: Demyx, Dreaming Awake, Lord Koryu
Past Names you'll know its me by: Demyx, Dreaming Awake, Lord Koryu
Re: Sweet Silence
Respect his opinion..Nia wrote:I don't know what you're talking about, I thought it was a poem as a whole, something that has cemented you to a single thought of weakness. A missing effect from one person to another. I know what this is about.
Pretty good, Dreaming.
Decisions to decisions are made and not bought, but I thought this wouldn't hurt a lot. I guess not.
Re: Sweet Silence
Thanks, Kage and Iris. =]
Is there anything I can do to make it better? I don't do poetry often, and when I do, the tones and way the poem is read seems to change with every one, so I really don't know if I've done a good job or a bad one.
Is there anything I can do to make it better? I don't do poetry often, and when I do, the tones and way the poem is read seems to change with every one, so I really don't know if I've done a good job or a bad one.
Please, I am but a smol potate.
Past Names you'll know its me by: Demyx, Dreaming Awake, Lord Koryu
Past Names you'll know its me by: Demyx, Dreaming Awake, Lord Koryu
Re: Sweet Silence
You've...done a good job...whenever you do poetry.....it turns.......out very good.......you......always put.....a.....lot of heart......into each piece........
I...have to go.....
I...have to go.....
(RAH)² (AH)³ + RO (MA + MAMA) + (GA)² + OOH(LA)²
Re: Sweet Silence
Thank you...
Please, I am but a smol potate.
Past Names you'll know its me by: Demyx, Dreaming Awake, Lord Koryu
Past Names you'll know its me by: Demyx, Dreaming Awake, Lord Koryu
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Re: Sweet Silence
Yeah. That's what I thought. It's actually very good.Dreaming Awake wrote:Its one poem as a whole, but you can also look at it as two poems, if you only read the italicized portion as one.
Why is love not meant for me at all? Do I deserve this?
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Re: Sweet Silence
Thank you, Taylor. =]
Please, I am but a smol potate.
Past Names you'll know its me by: Demyx, Dreaming Awake, Lord Koryu
Past Names you'll know its me by: Demyx, Dreaming Awake, Lord Koryu
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Re: Sweet Silence
You're very welcome. ^^Dreaming Awake wrote:Thank you, Taylor. =]
Why is love not meant for me at all? Do I deserve this?
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