The Tears of God

[Bacchikoi Baby!!!]

Im currently doing a Haruhi Suzumiya fanfic and when I get home, i will post the first chapter. i have the first 3 done, but i want some opinions. ill give you guys a short summary of the first 3 chapters so far:
(1, Kyon's POV) Kyon loses his temper and yells are Haruhi and says that there are times he wishes that he didnt meet Haruhi. Haruhi ran out crying, becuase everyone knows that she is in love with Kyon, except haruhi and kyon themselves. The other 3 Brigade members tell him to make up with her right away. Well, Haruhi wont pick up her phone when Kyon calls.
(2, Kyon's POV) The next day, he wakes up and goes to school as normal, with a really annoying girl sitting behind him((guess who)). He doesnt seem to know who this girl is. After school, the only one with any memories of what happened, Yuki, approaches Kyon and asks him if he made up with her yet. He replies that he doesnt know what Yuki is talking about. Yuki simply replies "I see" and walks away. Kyon feels as if he is missing somehting ,but ignores that feeling and goes home as normal.
(3, Koizumi's POV) Yuki finds Koizumi and reveals herself to him and also tells him about Mikuru and Kyon, giving him a short account of what she is, about the Brigade, and what happened yesterday. She says that things need to be fixed or else. She also notes that Koizumi has been dealing with more closed spaces recently for no apparent reason. When she asks for his help in returning things to the way that they were, he replies that he needs to talk to his Orginazation to see if he can help.

thats all i have so far. the 4th chapter is either gonna be Yuki talking to Mikuru or Koizumi talking to his Orginazation. Please feel free to give me ideas and if you would like to be credited with them when i finally post them. I will post them on fanfiction.net and i will post the link to the exact fanfic. please tell me what you guys think of my story idea so far.

[Bacchikoi Baby!!!]

here is Chapter 1:
There I was, again at Haruhi’s mercy. As were Asahina-san and Nagato. Koizumi hadn’t arrived in the club room yet. And once again, Haruhi was losing her temper because Asahina-san didn’t want to dress up in some ridiculous and overly-revealing outfit. “Haruhi, don’t you ever think of anyone but yourself?” Oh no. What did I just say?
“What was that Kyon? Are you saying I’m selfish?”
“Yes. That is exactly what I am saying. You are selfish and with everything you have selfishly put us through, there are times that I never met you.” I had no idea what had just come over me.
The room was quiet. Asahina-san had gasped. Nagato stopped reading her book. There were tears in Haruhi’s eyes. Tears in the eyes of God.
I can’t believe it, I just made Haruhi cry. At this moment, she seemed like a normal school girl. She ran out crying.
Koizumi ran in right after he saw Haruhi run out. “What happened?” The smirk on his that was usually there wasn’t there at this moment. “Why is Suzamyia-san crying?”
Asahina-san explained what happened in the last few minutes.
Koizumi wasn’t happy. “You need to make up with her right away. If you don’t, the whole world could be destroyed and recreated. Or she could decide to erase you from this world and from our memories.” Koizumi’s phone rang. He answered it. When he was done, he looked at me, “Well, we have closed spaces coming up everywhere due to Suzamyia-sans fit. You need to go make up with her as soon as you can.”
I sighed. Koizumi was right. I pulled out my phone and called her. She didn’t answer her phone. “I’ll keep calling her for the rest of the day until she picks up. Until then, we should go home.”
It was agreed upon. I kept trying to call her all day, but she never answered. I went to bed with an uneasy feeling that night.

[Bacchikoi Baby!!!]

chapter 2:
I woke up that morning and felt like something was amiss. I shrugged it off and got ready to go to school. I was still feeling as if something was wrong, but I couldn’t quite place my finger on it.
I got there and sat in my seat. The annoying girl sat behind me. What was her name again? Oh yeah, Haruhi Suzamyia. At the beginning of the year she said something weird about looking for Espers, Aliens, and Time-travelers. I don’t know what that was about, but whatever. She was weird. What she needed was a boyfriend.
The weird girl stood up. “I’m forming a club that will search for aliens, time-travelers and espers. If anyone knows anybody who is any of these things, come and tell me. That is all.”
I almost started to laugh out loud. This girl was still going on about that? Well, the rest of the day seemed to go on like normal, until the end of the day. I got approached by a purple haired girl. She cornered me at my shoe locker. “Hi?”
“Kyon, you failed to make up with Suzumiya-san. This has a caused a massive distortion in the data contained in this area. In order to fix this data distortion, you must find her now and apologize for you grave error in judgement.”
I raised an eyebrow. “Who is Suzumiya-san?” I thought for a moment. “You mean the crazy girl in my class? The one looking for time travelers and espers and aliens? Why do I need to make up with her? When have I ever spent time with her? I haven’t done anything to her at all.”
Her eyes didn’t even change. She didn’t even blink. “I see.” She turned around and walked away.
I watched her walk away. “What was that about?” I shrugged it off and took off my school shoes and put on my normal ones.
I couldn’t help but feel as if something was off. I shrugged it off as not feeling well. So I decided to go home and sleep on it.

[Bacchikoi Baby!!!]

chapter 3:
“Itsuki Koizumi. I must talk to you.”
A purple haired girl approached me. And from the looks of it, she knew a lot of things that I didn’t. I kept my smile up. “Who might you be, miss?”
The purple haired girl looked at me, her expression unchanging. “I am what is known as a humanoid interface, from the Data Integration Thought Entity. What Suzumiya-san would call an alien. I know that you belong to a group who call themselves espers, and that you belong to a large group of espers who believe that Suzumiya-san is God. At the beginning of the year, Suzumiya-san made a club for the sole purpose of finding aliens, time-travelers and epsers. She called this club the SOS Brigade. One from each group, you, myself, and Asahina Mikuru, were all members of this club. There was also one anomaly. His name is Kyon and he is a normal human. He is the only one able to calm Suzumiya-san’s tempers and other emotions. Yesterday, he expressed that he wished that he never net her. She ran out of the room crying. He tried to apologize to her through a cellular phone, but she would not answer. Since 12:00AM, there has been an abnormal change in the data surrounding everyone in Brigade. I went to Kyon at his shoe locker this afternoon and confronted him about apologizing to Suzumiya-san. He had no memory of ever being in the Brigade. And judging by the way you reacted to me, you did too. It’s logical to conclude that everyone that was in the Brigade has no memory of ever being in the Brigade. We must get Asahina Mikuru and Kyon together and the Data Thought Integration will give the access to the power to restore everyone within the Brigade’s memories, including Suzumiya-san, with the exception of the memory when Kyon says he wishes that he did not meet Suzumiya-san. You have been experiencing more closed spaces recently for no apparent reason, correct? This is the reason why. If we work together, we should be able to bring things back to normal. Will you cooperate?”
I needed time to think this over. “I will have to talk to the Organization about this. I should be able to get back to you in a few days. But you still haven’t told me your name.”
The purple haired girl’s expression didn’t change. “I see. This unit is known as Nagato Yuki.”
This was a surprise for me. I knew other organizations existed, but there was an unspoken rule that we were never to confront each other. This goes against that rule and everything that it stood for. This could even be a trick to get some sort of desired reaction out of Suzumiya-san. I watched as the girl named Nagato Yuki walked away to do who knows what.
I lost my smirk as soon as she left and sighed. I took out my cell phone and called the Organization.