Absolute Anime

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It's a great story hun, the descriptions are very detailed to the point that the audience able to tell what is exactly happening without seeing pictures. The story itself is not too long either, short but yet it fits together perfectly without dragging too long.

The scene of the story of the story adds to the excitement too as at any time the girls could get discovered and yet it happened. Your very good at using words to describe things hun.
I like it!

P.S. come on people I see views increase but no comment. we all adults no need to be shy to comment.

That made me almost p*ss myself with laughter no offense

You are an Extremely talented story writer, Very good and Very detailed. Great job ^__^

Impressive, the imagery paints a portrait of exactaly what's going on. I also like that you avoided a lot of slang words commonly used in stories like this. Good job.

Very tasteful for this sort of thing

Aoi Sakuraba wrote:Thanks a bunch BHJ and Kaoru and Scorp, I appreciate the compliments, I tried my best to stay away from vulgar descriptive words.....I guess because it seemed to take away from the romance....not sure if I succeeded.

I'd consider it a success, the absence of vulgar words really did make a difference.

yea i agree with BHJ, it is rare to see stories like this without vulgar words it makes it more convincing i think. Unlike some people just do "I wanna this and that you etc..."

Kaoru Hanabishi wrote:yea i agree with BHJ, it is rare to see stories like this without vulgar words it makes it more convincing i think. Unlike some people just do "I wanna this and that you etc..."

here grab my testicles and like the roman testify you btch.

yup that sort of example

it was a good story and though i didn't quite agree with the topic (i was forced to read this upon demand), it was well written. the absence of vulgarity does add to the compliment.

WOW!!!! my g/f can write some good hentai, but DAMN!!!!..................thats the best ive seen in a while..............err....screw it, thats the best hentai ive read in a long time...................just dont tell anyone aboout it, i just recently turned 18......

Looking forward to it.

[ghetto]Daamn, thas some hawt [censored] right there.[/ghetto] XD

Though seriously, Aoi, you need to explore that writing ability you have..it's very good. I'll admit it does need a little work, but you really can put thoughts down on paper and make them flow like all the femme juices that came in this one.. (Gah, the puns, they burn!) But yeah, keep it up Aoi. Iz veddy veddy hawt..