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I'm currently writing a story, I've got two chapters done, and it's really really long. So I won't bother posting here because it's too long. It's not finished yet, however I'm always looking forward to criticisms. If anyone wants to be bothered reading any of it, I'll email it to you, only you have to give me your email, either publicly or through msn or email.

My msn is posted, so you can just add me.

The story is complicated, as it explores many different themes, but basically it's about a genderless youth. Well the main character isn't genderless so much as I just never reveal it. The character assumes numerous guises throughout the story to sabotage people. Sometimes for profit, other times for personal reasons. The price that Alex (the main character) charges depends on a lot of different things. First is the difficulty of the task, the other is the reasons behind the sabotage. Alex believes that there is a story behind everything, and uses sabotage as a way to connect with different people. Alex is also someone at odds with destiny, and constantly struggles against fates twisted hands.



Well that's really an inadequate explanation of the storyline, it's really something that you have to read.
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Get to work on finishing that story, Tightass.
Since when does something have to make sense to be logical?
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Let me tell you something. It'll be months before that story is finished.

don't rush perfection
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iv read what u sent me. loved what you sent me. EDITED what you sent me. and will be returning what you sent me, plus my revisions. XD! just grammar and spelling type revisions. =@
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The Joker wrote: Let me tell you something. It'll be months before that story is finished.

don't rush perfection
no such thing in writing.
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SASSZAIN wrote:
The Joker wrote: Let me tell you something. It'll be months before that story is finished.

don't rush perfection
no such thing in writing.
His is getting pretty close.
An ordinary girl, an ordinary waist; but ordinary's just not good enough today.
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Great work this is really good man
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Gaming Goddess wrote:
SASSZAIN wrote:
The Joker wrote: Let me tell you something. It'll be months before that story is finished.

don't rush perfection
no such thing in writing.
His is getting pretty close.
not including the major grammatical editing it needs. >.> =] still good though.
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;-; I'm only about half way through the second chapter. Its been sitting on my laptop begging me to read it, but I've been sooooooo busy.

I <3 reading it though.

It really applies to the harder/darker side of life and people. The way that the main character sees people is a clear cut way into seeing how people outside of common/normal society sometimes view those caught inside the rules and boundaries placed before them in life. << >> But I might have said too much. ^ ^;;
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Biki wrote:
Gaming Goddess wrote:
SASSZAIN wrote:
The Joker wrote: Let me tell you something. It'll be months before that story is finished.

don't rush perfection
no such thing in writing.
His is getting pretty close.
not including the major grammatical editing it needs. >.> =] still good though.
I've told you countless times. I care [censored] about grammatical mistakes for now. And I would hardly call them major. It's readable, that's my first concern making sure that the story is clear and good enough to spend all those hours editing and crap.
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i realize that it is a rough draft but as a grammar freak im inclined to see the grammatical errors in it. =/ but yes, it is readable. i wont complain about that much. >.>
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You should PM it to me.
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Biki wrote:i realize that it is a rough draft but as a grammar freak im inclined to see the grammatical errors in it. =/ but yes, it is readable. i wont complain about that much. >.>
ur grammers sucks anyways so wats the big deal u needs to grow up
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this is a great poem man keep up the great work
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Andre, my love, already your work is generating so much enthusiasm... :heh:
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Iris wrote: You should PM it to me.
You do realize that it's around 40 pages currently right? I don't think I could PM that to ya, I'll email it to ya if you give me an email though.
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