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I'm currently writing a story, I've got two chapters done, and it's really really long. So I won't bother posting here because it's too long. It's not finished yet, however I'm always looking forward to criticisms. If anyone wants to be bothered reading any of it, I'll email it to you, only you have to give me your email, either publicly or through msn or email.
My msn is posted, so you can just add me.
The story is complicated, as it explores many different themes, but basically it's about a genderless youth. Well the main character isn't genderless so much as I just never reveal it. The character assumes numerous guises throughout the story to sabotage people. Sometimes for profit, other times for personal reasons. The price that Alex (the main character) charges depends on a lot of different things. First is the difficulty of the task, the other is the reasons behind the sabotage. Alex believes that there is a story behind everything, and uses sabotage as a way to connect with different people. Alex is also someone at odds with destiny, and constantly struggles against fates twisted hands.
Well that's really an inadequate explanation of the storyline, it's really something that you have to read.
My msn is posted, so you can just add me.
The story is complicated, as it explores many different themes, but basically it's about a genderless youth. Well the main character isn't genderless so much as I just never reveal it. The character assumes numerous guises throughout the story to sabotage people. Sometimes for profit, other times for personal reasons. The price that Alex (the main character) charges depends on a lot of different things. First is the difficulty of the task, the other is the reasons behind the sabotage. Alex believes that there is a story behind everything, and uses sabotage as a way to connect with different people. Alex is also someone at odds with destiny, and constantly struggles against fates twisted hands.
Well that's really an inadequate explanation of the storyline, it's really something that you have to read.
Yeah, you were right about me, but can I get myself out from underneath this guilt that will crush me? in the choir, I saw our sad Messiah he was bored and tired of my laments
He said, "I died for you one time, but never again"
He said, "I died for you one time, but never again"
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Let me tell you something. It'll be months before that story is finished.
don't rush perfection
don't rush perfection
Yeah, you were right about me, but can I get myself out from underneath this guilt that will crush me? in the choir, I saw our sad Messiah he was bored and tired of my laments
He said, "I died for you one time, but never again"
He said, "I died for you one time, but never again"
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iv read what u sent me. loved what you sent me. EDITED what you sent me. and will be returning what you sent me, plus my revisions. XD! just grammar and spelling type revisions. =@
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no such thing in writing.The Joker wrote: Let me tell you something. It'll be months before that story is finished.
don't rush perfection
"You dont have to be alive to make yourself relevant.And you dont have to be a good person to be a hero.You just have to know who you are and stay true to that.So Im going to keep fighting for people the only way I ever knew how"-Vriska Serket
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His is getting pretty close.SASSZAIN wrote:no such thing in writing.The Joker wrote: Let me tell you something. It'll be months before that story is finished.
don't rush perfection
An ordinary girl, an ordinary waist; but ordinary's just not good enough today.
Who needs imagination when you have a television?
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Who needs imagination when you have a television?
Half of the Dream Team. Sup Mike?
BIKI! =3
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not including the major grammatical editing it needs. >.> =] still good though.Gaming Goddess wrote:His is getting pretty close.SASSZAIN wrote:no such thing in writing.The Joker wrote: Let me tell you something. It'll be months before that story is finished.
don't rush perfection
ikiBBiki 
*~Color Me Impressed~*
In honor of Cold Revolver: I am not gay, I'm just colorful Betch! =-]
*~Color Me Impressed~*
In honor of Cold Revolver: I am not gay, I'm just colorful Betch! =-]
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;-; I'm only about half way through the second chapter. Its been sitting on my laptop begging me to read it, but I've been sooooooo busy.
I <3 reading it though.
It really applies to the harder/darker side of life and people. The way that the main character sees people is a clear cut way into seeing how people outside of common/normal society sometimes view those caught inside the rules and boundaries placed before them in life. << >> But I might have said too much. ^ ^;;
I <3 reading it though.
It really applies to the harder/darker side of life and people. The way that the main character sees people is a clear cut way into seeing how people outside of common/normal society sometimes view those caught inside the rules and boundaries placed before them in life. << >> But I might have said too much. ^ ^;;
Please, I am but a smol potate.
Past Names you'll know its me by: Demyx, Dreaming Awake, Lord Koryu
Past Names you'll know its me by: Demyx, Dreaming Awake, Lord Koryu
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I've told you countless times. I care [censored] about grammatical mistakes for now. And I would hardly call them major. It's readable, that's my first concern making sure that the story is clear and good enough to spend all those hours editing and crap.Biki wrote:not including the major grammatical editing it needs. >.> =] still good though.Gaming Goddess wrote:His is getting pretty close.SASSZAIN wrote:no such thing in writing.The Joker wrote: Let me tell you something. It'll be months before that story is finished.
don't rush perfection
Yeah, you were right about me, but can I get myself out from underneath this guilt that will crush me? in the choir, I saw our sad Messiah he was bored and tired of my laments
He said, "I died for you one time, but never again"
He said, "I died for you one time, but never again"
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i realize that it is a rough draft but as a grammar freak im inclined to see the grammatical errors in it. =/ but yes, it is readable. i wont complain about that much. >.>
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*~Color Me Impressed~*
In honor of Cold Revolver: I am not gay, I'm just colorful Betch! =-]
*~Color Me Impressed~*
In honor of Cold Revolver: I am not gay, I'm just colorful Betch! =-]
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ur grammers sucks anyways so wats the big deal u needs to grow upBiki wrote:i realize that it is a rough draft but as a grammar freak im inclined to see the grammatical errors in it. =/ but yes, it is readable. i wont complain about that much. >.>
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this is a great poem man keep up the great work
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You do realize that it's around 40 pages currently right? I don't think I could PM that to ya, I'll email it to ya if you give me an email though.Iris wrote: You should PM it to me.
Yeah, you were right about me, but can I get myself out from underneath this guilt that will crush me? in the choir, I saw our sad Messiah he was bored and tired of my laments
He said, "I died for you one time, but never again"
He said, "I died for you one time, but never again"
